The lure of William Golding's Rites of Passage was too strong, so I am rereading the trilogy that I bombed through last spring. I wrote a lot in emails about the plot, the characters, and the narratology, but this time through I'm paying a bit more attention to the finer details. Now that I know how silly he really is, I'm appreciating Edmund's privileged bumbling from the beginning, which means a lot more laughs than confusion about whether I should be taking him seriously. (If the answer is yes, I will find William Golding's grave and we will have words.)
I remembered one line word-for-word from my first read-through. It was short, came up in a powerful scene and...did not seem to make grammatical sense.
Edmund: "He were afraid of drowning."
Were? What the heck? Maybe I only remembered this because, when I watched the BBC version, Edmund said the exact same thing out loud. In the book it might have been a slip in Edmund's writing (this gives Golding a lot of credit), but in the filmed version there is no question that "He were afraid of drowning" is what he actually says.
I'd been wondering about the extent to which Golding's writing style was intentional vs. simply serendipitous. For example, the first book, which Edmund is supposedly writing for his godfather, seemed to have a bit of a higher tone and writing style than the next two, which Edmund writes for himself. Did Golding do this intentionally (Wikipedia seems to think so)? Was it a kind of laziness not to be writing the follow-up in such heavy-handed language? Or had I simply gotten used to the writing by that point? I'll keep you posted.
But, on this read-through, I found an opposite situation:
There was a number of officers on the quarterdeck. (RoP 37)
O...kay.
So what's up with this?
Is it some 18th/19th century usage that's gone out of favor; grammatically correct on a technicality; Golding showing us that Talbot is, even in his writing, only human; or something else?
[Quick complaint: I cannot tell you how difficult it is to look up "were" and "was" in grammar books and online. The words are too common to help in the latter and tend to be lumped with moods and tenses rather than indexed on their own in the former.]
The Little, Brown Essential Handbook (6th ed.) and NCSU's Online Writing Lab seem to indicate that this could be an example of the subjunctive mood, but I don't think that's what's going on here. The examples using "were" show "desire or present condition contrary to the fact": "If the theater were in better shape, its future would be guaranteed."
"He were afraid of drowning" is speculative; at this point in the story, there's no knowing if the character being discussed was, in fact, afraid of drowning. Considering the play that Golding/Edmund have with words whose meanings don't perfectly line up with how they're used (and I know: when a word didn't make sense in its context, I wrote it down and looked it up)(a symptom of changed usage since the 19th century or of Edmund's upper-class superiority?), I'd be willing to accept that that were could be a subjunctive in this situation because the statement is speculation.
Now there's an interesting thought: What if Edmund was--sorry, were just making it up? I sidetracked that thought too quickly by reminding myself that, well, Golding is making it up. There's not exactly evidence, either, or a reason to look for it. So let's drop that idea.
But--but, but, but--I have yet to see anything in my sources to indicate that the subjunctive goes the other way. If it's in Strunk & White, it's not in the index. So a sentence like the one that started this,
He were afraid of drowning,
passes subjunctive muster while another sentence that might, situationally, work,
Edmund: A few [passengers] would welcome it if you was to conduct a service (RoP 64),
might not.
This last sentence could be another instance of Golding being clever, this time to underline Edmund's privilege: using was makes the sentence indicative, so that he literally indicates what he expects from the reverend to whom he's speaking. (Nevermind that he phrases it as a general request--he's just admitted in the text that he's asking this for selfish reasons, to spite the captain). The situation reminds me of all the talk about why women don't get raises as often or as much as men--society teaches us that men will get their way. Young, white, British, upper-class, be-patroned Edmund is the 19th century's creme de la creme. Why shouldn't he use the indicative was in his "request"? He expects his will to be done because the possibility that it might not does not cross his mind!
That still leaves us with "There was a number of officers on the quarterdeck." Gah!
I'm Googled out. Anyone else have any thoughts about that one?